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Embers by ~wiccanwolfsrose:iconwiccanwolfsrose:

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I watch the corner catch,
I watch the fire spread,
I watch your image fade,
As the fire consumes you.

You told me you loved me,
Makes me want to cry,
Thinking about your façade,
Oh, the fool I played.

I watch the corner catch,
I watch the fire spread,
I watch your image fade,
As the fire consumes you.

What do you tell her,
The girl I see by your side,
Do you tell her how I broke you,
You were always good with a lie.

I watch the corner catch,
I watch the fire spread,
I watch your image fade,
As the fire consumes you.

The past is over in this moment,
As everything you were,
Turns to ashes, turns to dust,
As the flames simply consume.

I turn and walk away,
The embers of the past cool.
©2006-2010 ~wiccanwolfsrose
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i dont know where i can up with this either

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~irishhellgirl Sep 5, 2006, 10:57:51 AM
It's good, but i dont think that the chorus flows well, the last line seems a bit out of it to me personally. But other than that it is great. :D

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Castro is alive? O.o
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~wiccanwolfsrose Sep 5, 2006, 11:00:10 AM
thnx
i'll take a look at it and see what i can do

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It is okay to talk to inanimate objects...but when they start answering you, That is NOT a good sign.
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~irishhellgirl Sep 5, 2006, 11:06:13 AM
:) Its is a great poem none the less :]

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Castro is alive? O.o
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~wiccanwolfsrose Sep 5, 2006, 11:25:47 AM
thnx

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It is okay to talk to inanimate objects...but when they start answering you, That is NOT a good sign.
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~Masterspuppeteer Sep 5, 2006, 8:01:47 PM
if this is about "feeling" rather than meter and rhyme, then you have accomplished your objective......and VERY WELL; I might add!!
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~wiccanwolfsrose Sep 6, 2006, 10:01:08 AM
thank you

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It is okay to talk to inanimate objects...but when they start answering you, That is NOT a good sign.
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